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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Finding historical information about places where
people
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 live can be helpful for understanding the area where it was built and
architecture
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the architecture
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 of the house.
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 desire leads to different factors
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 the curiosity of the person,
appearance
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the appearance
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 of the building or finding the connection with the past. There are different ways
people
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 can
research
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for instance
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 internet researching or finding archives. One of the primary explanations for
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 is the desire based on personal identity and roots in the past. Nowadays during globalization and technological development, a huge number of
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 feel displaced and alienated. Researching
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the way of living of predecessors can give a sense of place and help to assist in raising a person’s awareness of what is happening around them.
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, easy access to online resources
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 as online archives of historical societies,
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and digitized
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 documents
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makes
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 it much easier to learn new about
history
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 than was previously the case. Popular culture has played its part too. Documentary and TV shows which focus on historic places, building design, and family
history
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research
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 have influenced the public worldview and caused a desire to uncover equivalent histories. These shows depict historical
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 as an exciting quest, inspiring viewers to have a go at
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research
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 themselves too. The increased interest
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in
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 the
history
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 of resident areas is triggered by an aspiration for individual connection with
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, ease of access to information on the internet, and pop culture. Government documents, and
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internet-based technologies help
people
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 to have the opportunities to
research
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about
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the
history
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 of the places and solve all the questions connected with it.

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task achievement
You have identified multiple reasons for people's interest in historical research, which is good!
coherence and cohesion
The use of simple and clear language is effective for understanding.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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