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The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the number of
visitors
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 to Orange City, measured in thousands, in the years 2017 and 2020,
along with
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 projections for 2030.
Overall
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, all categories experienced an upward trend during
this
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 period, with sporting
events
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 attracting the most
visitors
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 and
theater
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events
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 drawing the fewest. In terms of specific figures, sporting
events
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 emerged as the primary attraction for
visitors
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 to Orange City. In 2017, approximately 14,000 tourists attended these
events
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.
This
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 number saw a slight increase to around 15,000 in 2020 and is projected to reach 17,000 by 2030. Meanwhile, the number of
visitors
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for
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 concerts started at about 3,000 in 2017 and rose modestly to 4,500 in 2020. Looking ahead,
this
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 figure is expected to surge dramatically to 12,000 by 2030.
In contrast
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,
theater
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events
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 recorded the lowest attendance. In 2017, there were roughly 1,000
visitors
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, which increased slightly to 2,000 in 2020.
However
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,
this
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 category is projected to grow more significantly, reaching around 4,700
visitors
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 in 2030.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, events with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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