the line chart below shows the number of international conferences in three cities

the line chart below shows the number of international conferences in three cities
The line provided chart illustrates the number of international
conferences
held in three cities over a period of 45 years from 1965 to 2010. From an
overall
perspective, It is readily apparent that there was a dramatic increase in the number of international
conferences
in downtown C,
whereas
, it can be seen the reversed pattern in cities A and B shown.
To begin
with, the
figure
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for the international
conferences
in
city
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A and B are respectively about 35% and 30% in 1965,following 10 years, the quantities of both 2 cities leveled off
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30% to 29 %. the
last
period they decreased slightly including 20,25 %
On the other hand
,
it is clear that
the
amount
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of worldwide
conferences
held in city C gradually rose from 0% to 30% from 1965 to 1995.Followed by 25% in 2005 and the
last
period it can be seen rebound about 30%
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