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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.
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The given chart illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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 from three different countries who moved to crowded cities from villages since the year 2000,
in addition
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 to a forecast of
this
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number
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 for 2025. As it is observed, the
amount
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 of these
people
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 went up in all these countries in
this
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 20-year period, especially in
Iran
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 and
Russia
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, which jumped to
rocket
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.
First,
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in 2000;
Iran
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, Indonesia and
Russia
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 had nearly the same
amount
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 of 10
million
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 individuals moving out of Rural areas,
However
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,
this
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number
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 rapidly grew in
Russia
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 and
Iran
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 by 2010, despite the fact that
this
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number
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 was constant in
Iran
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 for around five years between 2000 and 2005.
Furthermore
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,
while
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Russia
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 was experiencing a drastic climb in the
number
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 of villagers who chose to Live in urban parts of the country between 2010 and 2015, the population of these
peoplepeople
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people
 in
Iran
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 had more of a slight increase and reached 50
million
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. By 2020, the
number
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 rose to a certain
amount
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 of 80
million
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 in both countries and is expected to reach its peak by 2025 and pass 85 and 95
million
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 in
Iran
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 and
Russia
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 respectively. As for Indonesia, not a lot of
people
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 chose cities over not very crowded areas,
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, the
number
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 of
people
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 who moved to urban parts of the country from rustic parts went up very modestly between the year 2000 and 2020 and reached only 30
million
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.
This
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amount
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 is predicted to remain stable by 2025 and not to go above 30
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, amount, iran, russia, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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