4.The diagram below shows the changes that have taken place at west park secondary school since its construction in 1950. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The process diagram provides information on how changes that West Park Secondary School was made by construction places in

three

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different years 1950, 1980 and 2010.

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it is clear that

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the main road and the main building school have not changed any year,

as well as

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the science block since its new design in 1980.

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, the playground was reduced by

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quarters compared to its original

size

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slightly small in 2010. In 1950, the old decade's farmland and houses were the same

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but there are

three

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houses

this

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year, but in 1980 the newly built car park and science block were replaced by houses. It is a new playing zone created by a sports field

after

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this

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field damaged farmland. So, these two years did not change the other two zones. In 2010, the Sports field and playground

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decreased and the other two names (science block and school) did not change, but the Car park

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was increased by

overall

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three

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years.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

166 words

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