The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these courses
The given charts provide
the
information about the number of people coming to a variety of Correct article usage
apply
courses
offered by an adult education centre in 2009 and the percentage of the courses
' participants
divided into 5 age
groups. Overall
, there are more women
who are interested in attending the courses
and most participants
are from older group
of people (Fix the agreement mistake
groups
age
50 or above).
The number of women
attending language, painting, and drama classes are
higher than men. In the language class, there are 40 female Correct subject-verb agreement
is
participants
and only half number
of men attending. Correct article usage
the number
Similarly
, 30 women
come to painting class, and only a quarter of men show up. Drama class has a total of 30 participants
, with 20 of them being women
. In contrast
, sculpture
has 10 male Add an article
the sculpture
participants
and only 5 women
.
People aged 50 and more
attend the evening Correct word choice
older
courses
than other
Change the wording
another age group
other age groups
age
group, with just above 42%. Followed by participants
betweet
the Correct your spelling
between
age
of 40-49 with slighly
over a quarter. Adults Correct your spelling
slightly
aging
from 30-Replace the word
aged
39
, young adults, and teenagers account Change preposition
to 39
less
than 20% Change preposition
for less
in
each Change preposition
of
categories
.Change to a singular noun
category
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words courses, participants, age, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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