The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these courses

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The given charts provide

the

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apply

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information about the number of people coming to a variety of

courses

offered by an adult education centre in 2009 and the percentage of the

courses

participants

divided into 5

age

groups.

Overall

, there are more

women

who are interested in attending the

courses

and most

participants

are from older

group

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groups

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of people (

age

50 or above). The number of

women

attending language, painting, and drama classes

are

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higher than men. In the language class, there are 40 female

participants

and only half

number

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the number

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of men attending.

Similarly

, 30

women

come to painting class, and only a quarter of men show up. Drama class has a total of 30

participants

, with 20 of them being

women

In contrast

sculpture

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the sculpture

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has 10 male

participants

and only 5

women

. People aged 50 and

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older

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attend the evening

courses

than

other

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another age group

other age groups

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age

group, with just above 42%. Followed by

participants

betweet

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between

the

age

of 40-49 with

slighly

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slightly

over a quarter. Adults

aging

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aged

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from 30-

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to 39

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, young adults, and teenagers account

less

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for less

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than 20%

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each

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Overall Band Score

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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177 words

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