The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparisons where relevant

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The maps illustrate the transformation of a beach bank in 1950 compared

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now.

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, the beachfront

witness

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considerable changes with the most noticeable being the relocation and expansion of the main

road

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, car park and entertainment area. In 1950, the main

road

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was very short and located to the north of the beach. A car park was

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the bottom

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the main

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and next to the pavilion. In the past,

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coast was less entertainment and public area. Nowadays, the beachfront has experienced a lot of changes.

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, the main

road

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was radically extended to the east of the coast and next to the lighthouse.

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, a new

carpark

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car park

was built to replace the playground.

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, the beach river expands a lot of entertainment areas

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restaurant

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and double surf

club

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clubs

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, the swimming pool in the

south west

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has been expanded to add 25

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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Many people say that we have developed into a “throw-away” culture, because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To what extent do you agree with this opinion and what measures can you recommend reducing this problem ?

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