The diagram below illustrates the process where bricks are made for the building industry. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below illustrates the process where  bricks are made for the building industry. 

Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture diagram illustrates the flow
process
of
bricks
made for the construction industry.
Overall
, there are seven steps in the
process
, starting with raw material preparation through
clay
digging and ending with the packaging
process
to prepare
bricks
for delivery to the consumer. In the first step, we use an excavator to dig the
clay
from the ground; after that, there will be a metal grid and roller for crushing and screening the
clay
until it reaches a consistent texture.
Next,
the textured
clay
will be mixed with sand and water to form a desirable mixture. The third
process
is forming
bricks
, which can be done in two methods: where
clay
is pressed into
mold
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or extrusion, where the
clay
is cut into individual
bricks
by a wire cutter. The shaped
bricks
are left to dry in an oven for 24-48 hours before entering the kiln for the firing stage. There are two steps of burning
bricks
in the kiln, first at a moderate temperature of about 220-989 degrees Celsius, and second at a high temperature of 870-1300 degrees Celsius, in order to harden
bricks
. After that, the hardened
bricks
need to be left in the cooling chamber for 48-72 hours.
Finally
, the finished
bricks
are ready to be packaged and distributed to the consumer.
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