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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
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The given map provides us with information about how the village of Ryemouth looked back in 1995 and now.
Overall
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, it is crystal clear that there have been plenty of innovations. We can see that some of the facilities were replaced by others and a number of new
houses
Use synonyms
 were.
To begin
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 with, in 1995 in the north-west, there were
less
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fewer
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houses
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,
however
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, today the number of
houses
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 has increased,
in
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addition
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addition,
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 the roads
also
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 were developed
what
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 made reaching new
houses
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 more comfortable. In front of the
houses
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 to the north-east of the
city
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city,
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 there were
a
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apply
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farmland and a forest park below it. These areas were knocked down and replaced with new facilities: golf and tennis areas. In the south-east just beyond the hotel
also
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 new car parking is constructed. Moving towards the south of the map, we can see that there
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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fishing
Correct article usage
a fishing
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 port back in 1995, but it is not available now. There
also
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 were fish markets which are now replaced by new apartments.
Moreover
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, the shops
from
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on
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 the opposite side of the road
was
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were
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also
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 replaced by restaurants. The cafe from the south-east hasn't changed its place.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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