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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. F

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The two maps show us how the
city
 hospitals changed
ower
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over
show examples
 on 3 years The
city
 hospitals
was
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were
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 developed. And there was many
cleared
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more cleared
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place
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places
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 than before. It was a lot of
transformated
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transformed
 from
empty
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an empty
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city
 into a living area.
Tge
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The
most
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biggest
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 change is the places of
car
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the car
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park
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parks
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. Some roads in
city
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the city
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 hospital
was
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were
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 altered. And
considerable
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a considerable
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 amount
station
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stations
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 were
transtenned
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transferred
. In 2007 there
was
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were
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 no more places for
road
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roads
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 and
car
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cars
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. But
due to
 the large
population
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population,
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 the hospital
become
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became
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big
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a big
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city
 with a lot of roads. Whilst the hospital rd always was in own places the
car
 park
have
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has
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 many changed. The
car
 park that can be seen opposite the hospital rd in 2007
no
Add a missing verb
was no
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 longer excited by 2010
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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