The bar chart shows the number of male and female students doing scientific research across a range of disciplines at a UK university in 2009.

The bar chart shows the number of male and female students doing scientific research across a range of disciplines at a UK university in 2009.
The provided chart compares the
number
of UK
students
, divided by gender, who
conduct
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research
in
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6 different scientific topics in 2009.
Overall
, biology was the most popular discipline out of the other categories and veterinary
medicine
was chosen the least. The
number
of male
students
were
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higher in all topics, except for the animal-related field. Biology and physics shared a similar
number
of male
students
with around 240 and 230 respectively.
Similarly
, astronomy and geology had the same exact
number
with 150 male
students
.
Medicine
also
had a quite big
number
accounting
200
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male
students
.
Lastly
, veterinary
medicine
had the smallest proportion with only a
three quarter
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of male
students
. The
number
of female
students
choosing biology was the highest compared to the other categories, with 200
students
. Followed by
medicine
with approximately 175 female
students
.
In contrast
with male
students
, veterinary
medicine
was popular among female
students
which
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reached
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to
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around 110. There were fewer than 100 female
students
who chose astronomy and geology, with 75 and 60
students
respectively. The discipline that was chosen the least in the
women
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categoty
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category
was physics with just 40 female
students
.
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