The graph below gives information on the number of participants of different activities at one social centre in Melburne , Australia for the period from 2000 to 2020.
Line
graph illustrates the Add an article
The line
quantity
of Change the quantifier
number
members
, who are
chose different extracurricular activities at one of the social Unnecessary verb
apply
center
, which is located in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020. Fix the agreement mistake
centers
Overall
, the film club
garnered the highest participation rates among Melbourne residents throughout the period
. Table tennis and musical performances experienced significant growth in participation towards the later years, while
amateur dramatics saw a decline in popularity.
One of the most popular activities in any period
of time is Movie club
, which has never fall
below 60 participants. Wrong verb form
fallen
At
the beginning, Change the preposition
In
Film
Correct article usage
the Film
club
is
stood Unnecessary verb
apply
on
the highest point of the value (around 60 to 70). Change preposition
at
However
, there is dropped into
60 Change preposition
to
club
members
in 2010. After, the numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
people
, who are invited to Movie
Correct article usage
the Movie
club
, are
increased and Verb problem
apply
achieve
below 70 Verb problem
reached
at the end
of the period
. At the same time, Martial
arts Correct article usage
the Martial
club
also
has shown same
fluctuation level on Correct article usage
the same
graph
. In 2020, Correct article usage
the graph
this
type of action is taken the
average of the Change preposition
by the
club
’s people
number. At
the Change preposition
In
mid
of the Correct your spelling
middle
period
, indicator
Add an article
the indicator
an indicator
is risen
to 40 parties. And again fell down to the same index as at the starting time.
In participation Wrong verb form
rose
toward to
the later years is crucial growth by table tennis and musical Change preposition
apply
performances
clubs. In 2005, and musical performances Change the noun form
performance
club
is
opened and Wrong verb form
was
at the end
of the 20s
the total number reached less than 20 Add a comma
20s,
members
. Table
tennis Add an article
The table
A table
club
is
started with less than 20 Unnecessary verb
apply
people
and in 2010 attain
exactly 20 parties, Wrong verb form
attained
such
as amateur
dramatics Correct article usage
the amateur
club
. On the other hand
, activity
of amateur dramatics, which Correct article usage
the activity
is
had participants below Unnecessary verb
apply
than
30 dramatically dropped Change preposition
apply
into
Change preposition
to
the
less than 10 Correct article usage
apply
people
. As a result
, Correct article usage
the sport
sport
Change the noun form
sports
club
is
Verb problem
will
continued
until it Wrong verb form
continue
is reached
more than 50 Wrong verb form
reaches
members
in 2020.Submitted by galkalialex on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words members, club, period, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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