You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
the graph below shows
that
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apply
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the
percetages
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percentage
percentages
of
fours
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four
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west
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Western
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country
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countries
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between 1970 to 2020, with
guest
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guests
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from 2030 to 2040
Firstly
,the most of
population
are
philippines
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Philippines
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on
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in
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1970 ,
in addition
,the lower of
population
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the population
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is ındonessia ,
on the other hand
,
the
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at the
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starting
1980's
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1980s
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,
malaysia
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Malaysia
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of
populations
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population
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are increasing
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increased
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than
other
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the other
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three countries and
come
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came
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fisrt
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first
at
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in
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2040 .At the same time ,
while
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Malaysia
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malaysia
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Malaysia
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and ındonesia of cıtızens approximately three-times were
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increased
incresed
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increased
,
thailand
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Thailand
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and
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Philippines
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the philippines
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philippines
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Philippines
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has
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doubled
Although
the
Philippines
passed
Malaysia
in 1970 and 1990, the
Philippines
had the highest
population
in 2000,
while
Indonesia passed Thailand in 2000 and
then
surpassed the
Philippines
in 2010 to become the second. In short, the graph below shows the
population
of four countries,
while
the highest
population
was in the
Philippines
in 1970, the highest
population
was in
Malaysia
in 2040.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, philippines, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban population
  • Trend analysis
  • Urbanization rate
  • Economic development
  • Rural-urban migration
  • Infrastructure
  • Socio-economic events
  • Stagnation
  • Anomalies
  • Environmental concerns
  • Predictive analysis
  • Geographical aspects
  • Government policies
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