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Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Test 1: The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the average monthly change in the amount of three metals named
copper
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,
nickel
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 and
zinc
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 in 2014. Units are given in percentages.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 at the start,
nickel
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 was exorbitant but with time the
price
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 reduced heavily and other metals too fluctuated. In January,
nickel
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 was the most expensive metal, recording 6
percent
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per cent
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initially
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.
Also
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,
zinc
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 and
copper
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 recorded 1 and 2, respectively.
However
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, the
price
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for
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of
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nickel
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 drastically declined and reached
to
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apply
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-3% in the month of June.
This
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 was the lowest percentage change recorded in all materials.
Similarly
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, the cost of
copper
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also
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 reduced minorly and reached approximately 0.5%.
In contrast
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,
percentage
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the percentage
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 change in
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price
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the price
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 of
zinc
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 grew rapidly to 3% in February and heavily decreased to -1% by June. Thereby, the
price
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 for
nickel
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,
zinc
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 and
copper
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 metals inclined to -1%, 0.5% and 1%, respectively in July.
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, all three remained at their values for 2 months and followed the same trend with minor fluctuations and grew to 1%, 2% and 1.5%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, similarly".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, nickel, zinc, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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