Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Mass
tourism
is widely present in the contemporary world.
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, despite many
people
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advantage of what it offers, it is often believed that it has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. I partly agree with
this
thesis and claim that it has both pros and cons.
Tourism
has
a
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significant benefits for visiting states. First and foremost, it improves their economy. In poorer regions of the
world
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a huge part of the society lives from
tourism
, which means that they
provides
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accomodation
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accommodation
, food, and entertainment for
tourists
,
thus
, travellers have a positive impact on the visiting country.
Furthermore
, there are many different types of
tourists
- to illustrate
it
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,
for
instance
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backpackers are the
people
who try to get involved and help the society they visit. Not only
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they sightseeing, but
also
often teach
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in local schools, take part in
workcamps
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work camps
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, and,
what
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the
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most
important
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, respect the community that
host
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them. On the other
hadn
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hand
,
a
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relevant drawbacks of mass
tourism
are presented too. The most significant of them is
interupting
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interrupting
every
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the
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day
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everyday
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life of residents. In places
such
as Venice, Italy or Paris, France, a massive influx of travellers can handicap the
life
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of local
people
, who suffer from crowded streets and high prices.
In addition
, most
of
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tourists
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the tourists
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do not really care about
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the naturall
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naturall
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natural
environment of visiting places.
Consequently
, travellers can often contribute to the pollution of beaches, forests, and water recipients. In conclusion, I partly agree with the statement that mass
tourism
has a negative impact on the countries travelled to.
Tourists
can contribute to
pollution
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the pollution
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of the environment and
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the handicap
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handicap live
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of local
people
.
In contrast
,
however
, they
also
can boost the economy of visiting states
as well as
positivly
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positively
influence the hosting society in the form of workcamps, and
english
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lessons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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