The bar chart gives the top eight online activitiies in slovakia in a given month.
The graph shows the eight top online activities in Slovakia in the
mention
month.
Change the verb form
mentioned
Overall
, there are eight online activities used by male
and women, but women Fix the agreement mistake
males
use
the most. percentage in all of them. The three most use
are Replace the word
used
Email
, texting or instant
messages and social networking. Following
this
, the most use
for men are Replace the word
used
email
, instant
messaging and internet banking. The rest of then
like streaming, job hunting, health research and online education Correct your spelling
them
was
the least Correct subject-verb agreement
were
use
by both genders.
Women are the biggest users Replace the word
used
on using
Verb problem
of
email
with over 80 per cent
, and the second one was instant
messaging with less than 90 per cent
. Following
this
, the third one is social networking and internet
with less than 80 per Correct article usage
the internet
cent
. After
this
, streaming and health research with less than 60 per cent
. The least use
is job huntingReplace the word
used
,
and online education with less than 30 per Remove the comma
apply
cent
.
Men are the second most users with
Change preposition
of
email
and instant
messaging with less than 90 per cent
. After
this
, internet banking and social networking, and the third place is with health research and streaming with less than 60 per cent
. Finally
, the least used by men is online education with over 20 per cent
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this, following this".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, email, instant, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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