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Writing Samples
Band 5

The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours suggest what should be done about the problem

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Dear council manager I am writing about
situation
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the situation

The noun phrase situation seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 of rubbish collection in our
neighborhood
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neighbourhood

The spelling of neighborhood is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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in
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on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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west
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the west

The noun phrase west seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 of Star Street, Flower Alley. I would like to point out the system of work collection in our area is
weakness
Correct article usage
a weakness

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, because they are always late and there
are
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is

The plural form of be are does not seem to agree with the singular subject no punctual program. Consider changing the verb form.

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 no punctual
program
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programme

The word program doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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in
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for

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 their tasks.
on the other
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

hand
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hand,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase on the other hand. Consider adding a comma.

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 we have never seen
regular
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the regular
a regular

The noun phrase regular program seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 program in their garbage collection. Adding that
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 matter causes creating a lot of pollution and we can smell
variety
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a variety
the variety

The noun phrase variety seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 of bad smell things from our home too. I would
like
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like to

It appears that the verb inform should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

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 inform you
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 problem causes gathering street animals.
On the other
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

hand
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hand,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase On the other hand. Consider adding a comma.

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 there are ugly scenery and
bad
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a bad

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 outlook with
kind
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a kind

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 of rubbish and we are afraid that
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 failure may poison us. I hope you consider our problem, and resolve that as soon as possible once
for
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and for

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 all. I would be grateful if you arrange and inform us
the
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of the

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 result. Best wishes Ali Saremi

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task achievement
Try to elaborate more on how the waste problem specifically affects daily life. Providing more concrete examples can improve your task achievement score.
coherence cohesion
Improve paragraph structure by ensuring that each paragraph contains a single idea. For example, one paragraph for the issues, another for the effects, and a final one for suggestions.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases and connectors more frequently to improve the flow of your writing. This will enhance the coherence and cohesion of your letter.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriate for the context, which is positive for task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are suitable and add a professional touch.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rubbish collection schedule
  • overflow
  • accumulation
  • attracts pests
  • health hazards
  • unsightly appearance
  • foul odors
  • quality of life
  • reliable
  • frequent
  • community awareness programs
  • waste reduction
  • recycling
  • community composting solutions
  • organic waste
  • installation
  • public bins
  • strategic locations
  • littering
  • residential bins
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