The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day

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The two maps illustrate how

lynwich

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Lynch

Collage was in 2006 and how it is now.

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lynwich

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Lynch

collage

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college

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has developed

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when

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compared

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2006. It has more buildings and less green areas/tree areas. The main feature that has changed from 2006 to now is the path that used to

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connect

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diferents

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different

buildings. Nowadays, in the middle of everything and with all the

conecting

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connecting

paths is the cafeteria. Looking at the map from 2006 in more detail, there was a tree area in the north next to a road, now

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green area is

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smaller

and has been divided by a path that connects the new bus stop to the cafeteria. Moving to the east side of the map, the car park has been transformed

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a car park and a bike storage. The library, currently,

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is a bigger building,the sports centre. The sports field

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that

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is below the sports centre

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in the same place,

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however

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it is notable that has suffered a reduction in size. The green space with trees that it was

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located

on the

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south-west

has been changed to a library, which is connected with

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buildings 1 and 2.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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198 words

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