Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
One half
of society Add a hyphen
One-half
believe
that Correct subject-verb agreement
believes
people
should compete with each other in different aspects of life
such
as at work
, at school
and in everyday life
. When another half prefer
cooperating together than struggling with each other. Each side has advantages and disadvantages, Correct subject-verb agreement
prefers
however
in my opinion competing is better than cooperating with others.
On the one hand, competing at Add a comma
however,
work
can increase productivity
of workers. It is Add an article
the productivity
benefit
for employers Replace the word
beneficial
also
workers can get reward
from their employers. Fix the agreement mistake
rewards
Competition
at school
can increase marks
of students and give them motivation Correct article usage
the marks
for studying
. Change preposition
to study
Competition
between brends
Correct your spelling
brands
give
them Change the verb form
gives
aspiration
to making Add an article
the aspiration
better
product for Add an article
a better
people
than other brends
. And for these reasons, Correct your spelling
brands
breeds
i
prefer Change the capitalization
I
competition
in society.
On the other hand
, to solve daily life
problems cooperating
with Change preposition
by cooperating
Add an article
a friend
friend
, with relatives is a very good idea, but it is not Fix the agreement mistake
friends
same
good at Correct article usage
the same
work
and school
because when working together people
need Correct article usage
a lider
lider
to navigate them Correct your spelling
a ladder
otherwise
some people
in group
will Add an article
the group
a group
work
harder and others fewer. It is the same for the school
but not so critical as at work
because at education
centre students have Correct article usage
the education
teacher
that navigate and help them Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
what
they should do.
In conclusion, cooperating is good in some aspects of Change preposition
with what
life
but not in all areas. Competition
is very
important part of our society because without it we do not have these technologies, important openings and medicines. Even to land on the moon countries competed with each other. Correct article usage
a very
Also
it helps to find smart Add a comma
Also,
peoples
and Fix the agreement mistake
people
giving
them Wrong verb form
gives
chance
to improve their brainCorrect article usage
a chance
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples to illustrate your points, particularly when discussing the benefits of competition and cooperation.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly supports your main argument. For example, elaborate on how competition is necessary in various fields.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, contributing to an effective overall structure.
task achievement
You provide a balanced view by discussing both competition and cooperation.
Fully explain your ideas
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