Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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of society
believe
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that
people
should compete with each other in different aspects of
life
such
as at
work
, at
school
and in everyday
life
. When another half
prefer
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cooperating together than struggling with each other. Each side has advantages and disadvantages,
however
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in my opinion competing is better than cooperating with others. On the one hand, competing at
work
can increase
productivity
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the productivity
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of workers. It is
benefit
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for employers
also
workers can get
reward
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from their employers.
Competition
at
school
can increase
marks
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the marks
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of students and give them motivation
for studying
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.
Competition
between
brends
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brands
give
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them
aspiration
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the aspiration
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to making
better
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a better
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product for
people
than other
brends
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brands
breeds
. And for these reasons,
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prefer
competition
in society.
On the other hand
, to solve daily
life
problems
cooperating
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with
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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, with relatives is a very good idea, but it is not
same
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the same
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good at
work
and
school
because when working together
people
need
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lider
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a ladder
to navigate them
otherwise
some
people
in
group
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the group
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will
work
harder and others fewer. It is the same for the
school
but not so critical as at
work
because at
education
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the education
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centre students have
teacher
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teachers
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that navigate and help them
what
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with what
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they should do. In conclusion, cooperating is good in some aspects of
life
but not in all areas.
Competition
is
very
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a very
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important part of our society because without it we do not have these technologies, important openings and medicines. Even to land on the moon countries competed with each other.
Also
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it helps to find smart
peoples
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people
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and
giving
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gives
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them
chance
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a chance
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to improve their brain
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples to illustrate your points, particularly when discussing the benefits of competition and cooperation.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly supports your main argument. For example, elaborate on how competition is necessary in various fields.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, contributing to an effective overall structure.
task achievement
You provide a balanced view by discussing both competition and cooperation.

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