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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart examines the rate of
divorce
 in two European countries,
Finland
 and
Sweden
, for 5 years
since
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 2011 until 2015.
Overall
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cleary
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clearly
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obsearved
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observed
 that
divorce
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the divorce
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trend
of
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in
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Sweden
 was higher than
Finland
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in Finland
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,
excepted
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except
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only
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for only
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 the
last
one
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apply
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year, the
trend
 was different
that
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in that
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 people in
Finland
divorce
 more than
Sweden
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in Sweden
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. In 2011,
couple
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couples
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 in
Sweden
 broke up estimatly 45% higher than in
Finland
 that percentage is about 35%. The
trend
 in
year
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the year
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 2012 shows that
Sweden
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Sweden's
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couple
 separate
incraesed
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increased
 to almost 50%,
whereas
Finland
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Finland's
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trend
 dropped to almost 30%. The situation was changed differently again in 2013
that
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when
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Sweden
couple
devorce
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divorce
 decreased to around 48%, and
keep
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kept
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 in
down
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downtrend
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trend
continueuosly
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continuously
 to
be
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apply
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45% in 2014 and 38% in 2015.
Howver
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However
,
couple
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the couple
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devorce
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divorce
trend
 in
Finland
 rose to almost 40% in 2013,
continue
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continued
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in up
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apply
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trend
 to 42% in 2014 and
keep
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remained
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 stable at 42% in 2015. The main changing point was in 2013
that
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the
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 two countries'
divorce
trend
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trends
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convert
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converted
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 differently
caused
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causing
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 the final
trend
 in 2015 different from other
year
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years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, sweden, trend, couple with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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