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Last month, you travelled to another city. You told a friend who lives in the city that you would meet them, but you did not. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, - Apologise for not meeting him/her, - Explain why you did not contact him/her earlier - suggest a time and place to meet in the

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Dear Sophalis, I trust
this
 correspondence finds you in good spirits. I am writing to extend my most profound apologies for the unfortunate circumstances that prevented our rendezvous during my recent sojourn in China. It is with deep regret that I acknowledge my failure to honour our arrangements, and I feel compelled to elucidate the situation that transpired. Shortly after my arrival in the city, I was unexpectedly afflicted with a severe case of gastroenteritis, presumably
due to
 unfamiliar cuisine.
This
 debilitating condition confined me to my lodgings for the majority of my stay. The intensity of my illness was
such
 that I found myself bereft of the energy required to communicate my predicament. By the time I had sufficiently recuperated, my departure was imminent. I must confess that I should have contacted you at the earliest opportunity to apprise you of my situation.
However
, I found myself grappling with a sense of embarrassment regarding the entire episode. I procrastinated, hoping to formulate an appropriate explanation, but I now realize the error of my ways. I should have reached out immediately, regardless of the circumstances. Our friendship is of immense value to me, and I am deeply remorseful for having left you uninformed and, undoubtedly, perplexed by my silence. Best regards,
Layheang
Correct your spelling
Layering
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coherence cohesion
You have achieved an excellent coherence and cohesion in your letter, maintaining a logical flow from the beginning to the end. Your ideas are well-organized, with each paragraph sticking to a single idea, making it easy for the reader to follow your thoughts.
task achievement
While your letter contains a comprehensive response to the prompt, providing additional specifics about when and where you suggest meeting would enhance the completeness of your response.
suitable writing tone
Your use of advanced vocabulary and varied sentence structures contributes to a formal and suitable writing tone for this type of letter.
greeting and closing
The introduction and conclusion of your letter are effective, providing a strong start and a polite closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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