The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph gives information on the number of situations that people who live in different countries meet including Learning the local language, finding somewhere to live and making friends. The data

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separation and the units are measured in

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18 to 34

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range is 35 to 54, and the olds that

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the issue of Learning the local language was the most

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than 55

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54%, for middle-

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teenagers

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only 29%.

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two problems, finding somewhere to live and making friends were caused to the youngest group

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40% and 46% successively. Notwithstanding, for 35 to 54 group

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39% for sourcing the

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and 36% for finding new

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of eldest persons

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faced 22%

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, percentage, years with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

206 words

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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