The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph gives information on the number of situations that people who live in different countries meet including Learning the local language, finding somewhere to live and making friends. The data
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separation and the units are measured in
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. Generally speaking, it is evident that young
persons
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in
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18 to 34
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old faced the problem the most by plateaued
percentage
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range is 35 to 54, and the olds that
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55
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old is the lowest respectively. First and foremost, it is noticeable that
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the issue of Learning the local language was the most
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by the
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people
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than 55
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54%, for middle-
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-persons got effect 35%, and
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teenagers
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only 29%.
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two problems, finding somewhere to live and making friends were caused to the youngest group
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40% and 46% successively. Notwithstanding, for 35 to 54 group
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met
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for
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39% for sourcing the
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and 36% for finding new
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. The
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of eldest persons
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faced 22%
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finding and 23% of making friends,
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caused
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of individuals whose
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over than 55
years
had the lowest issues
percentage
.
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