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You organised a 90th birthday party in a hotel for a relative. Many elderly guests attended this party which of grand success. Write a letter to thank the hotel manager. In your letter, Give details of party the reasons why party was successful Mention a staff member who helped you a lot

Dear Manager, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding the party which we
did
Verb problem
had
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 the previous week. I organized a party at your hotel
last
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 week for the 90th birthday of my grandfather with more than 80 guests. The food at the celebration was fantastic, and the service of the food was a great idea because most of the people were old age.
Moreover
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, the arrangements were
also
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 fabulous as the waitressing services were so speedy and accurate. Even I liked the idea of putting small water bottles on the tables, that
also
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 made a huge difference. I want to mention one of your staff members Ritvik, He was humble and accurate in his work. He was with me in all the decorations, even the idea of putting water bottles on the table, so that the elderly people
can
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could
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 access them easily was given by him. Behind the successful ,party you guys have worked hard. Thanks for your services and the
amities
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amenities
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 which you allowed us to use. Yours faithfully,

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greeting and closing
Make sure to start with a nice greeting and end with a proper closing. This helps make the letter feel more friendly.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Try to focus on one point clearly in each paragraph for better clarity.
logical structure
Make sure all details about why the party was successful are given clearly and in a logical order.
task achievement
You shared specific details about the party, like the number of guests and the food quality. This shows good task achievement.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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