Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Animals

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far beyond human existence have lived on earth.

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, most of the fauna that have been on

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planet does not exist anymore. What is inevitable is that the effect of man in

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disaster is not ignorable. Years of exploiting

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nature and

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led to the extinction of many

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animal species. In

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I will discuss the causes of what has happened to these

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recommend some measures to tackle

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problem and prevent it from development. Right off the bat, it is crystal clear that climatory

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is one of the most important causes.

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, as temperature rises, many

animals

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that are accustomed to a certain level of temperature, suddenly find their place inhabitable.

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forces them

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to find another place.

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it is our duty to decrease the effects of human activities on

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the environment

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can be done by alternating the current means of energy

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in order to eliminate one of the factors that

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its role in global warming. Other than that, another man-made cause of extinction is destroying animal habitats. For many years mankind has abused nature for its own greed.

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appeared in many different forms

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as logging for

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of timber producing or paper manufacturing, excavating mountains and valleys for mining and destroying lands to construct roads and residential areas

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, in order to take precautions for

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destructions

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destruction

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governments can carry out

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that bans the human activities that

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a role in

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eradication of animal habitats.

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, it is evident that man’s self-important attitude toward

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has caused many troubles for

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some of them

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led to

destruction

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the destruction

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of their habitats.

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it is not late for

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humans

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. We can stop our destructive activities and make a better and cleaner world for us and for the generations to come.

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Try to use more specific examples to support your points. For example, mention specific species that have gone extinct due to climate change or habitat destruction.

coherence cohesion

Work on improving the logical flow between paragraphs. Adding transitional sentences can help guide the reader more smoothly from one idea to the next.

coherence cohesion

Refine your sentence structures to avoid occasional grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For instance, 'climatory changes' should be 'climatic changes' and 'place inhabitable' should be 'place uninhabitable.'

coherence cohesion

The essay is well-organized with a clear introduction and conclusion.

task achievement

You have addressed the task prompt effectively by discussing both the reasons for animal extinction and suggesting solutions.

coherence cohesion

The main points are relevant and logical, such as the discussion on climate change and habitat destruction.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

320 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

species extinction
endangered animals
biodiversity
habitat loss
deforestation
urbanization
poaching
illegal wildlife trade
climate change
pollution
conservation efforts
legislation
enforcement
human overpopulation
sustainable development
responsible consumption
education
awareness programs
protected areas
wildlife reserves
international cooperation
collaboration

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