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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given map illustrates the changes
of
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 the southwest airport before and after the renovation, which is planned to be done next year.
Overall
, there will be eighteen
gates
 in the redevelopment plan, in which people may access each gate by sky train.
Additionally
, there will be some features added in the arrivals
area
. The current site plan of
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the southwest
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southwest
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Southwest
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 airport is divided
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 two areas, the left
side
 is for departures,
while
 the
right
side
 is for arrivals. In the departure
area
, there is a
check in
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 counter on the left
side
 and
accross
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across
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it there is a cafe. Before the access to the
gates
, there are passport controls and security. Currently, there are eight
gates
 in the southwest airport with a walkway for people to access each gate.
On the other hand
, there are no facilities in the arrival
area
. By next year, the number of
gates
 will be increased to eighteen
gates
 in total, and a sky train will be built to replace the walkway. The
check in
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 counter in the departure
area
 will be moved to the
right
side
, replacing the cafe, which moved to the left
side
 of the entrance gate. A new facility, which is a bag drop, will be added in the departures
area
. On the
right
side
, which is the arrival
area
, a car hire, ATM, and cafe will be built on the
right
side
 of the
area
.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay is coherent and logically structured. However, adding a concluding sentence would provide a stronger sense of closure. This can help you achieve a clearer final impression.
task achievement
There is a clear and comprehensive response to the task, though a few details could be more specifically described. For example, mentioning that the cafe and check-in counter exchange locations would create clearer visual understanding.
task achievement
While your ideas are generally clear, make sure every piece of information is relevant and precisely described. For example, in describing the arrivals area, noting that these additions make the airport more service-oriented could add more depth.
task achievement
You've successfully described the changes between the current airport layout and the redevelopment plan in a comprehensible way.
coherence cohesion
Your usage of linking phrases like “On the other hand” and “By next year” greatly aids the reader in following your comparison.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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