Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement
It is often said that the government should spend some budget for the development of the country on the railways more than
roads
. I agree with Use synonyms
this
statement because train tracks have more benefits and services for large-scale populations.
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To begin
with, let's take a look at the factor why railways have more benefits than Linking Words
roads
. Nowadays, several Use synonyms
people
have personal cars and these reasons have an impact on the environment. Use synonyms
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the fact that cars or even the process of building Linking Words
roads
cause a lot of pollution Use synonyms
moreover
, it has many affected Linking Words
people
in that area if some area where Use synonyms
roads
are being built. Meanwhile, instituting the railway has advantages in the reasons of sustainability and lifetime that Use synonyms
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valuable than.
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In addition
, railways are generally more sustainable and have a lower environmental footprint compared to Linking Words
roads
. As they can move great quantities of population and goods more efficiently.Use synonyms
Furthermore
, it less pollution in view of the fact that the trend of eco-friendly is awareness in society today if governments can do Linking Words
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project they can have advertising with Linking Words
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trend as well.
Other than that, it can be a soft power that makes income for the country. Linking Words
For example
, in Japan, a lot of tourists go to Japan because of the trains that have cartoon characters Linking Words
such
as Hello Kitty, Doraemon and Picacho a famous character from Japan. So when Linking Words
tourist
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train with their own eyes and post it on any social it can be an advertisement without any pay and have several Linking Words
people
interested in it.
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To sum up
, train tracks have many advantages because it is more efficient in use and environmentally friendly than building Linking Words
roads
that cause problems affecting Use synonyms
people
rather than creating benefits and can promote the country at the same time.Use synonyms
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coherence cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow between your arguments. For example, use more linking words such as 'however,' 'therefore,' and 'in contrast' to make your essay more cohesive.
task achievement
Work on providing more detailed and clear arguments. Some points seem repetitive, and there could be more depth in the examples and explanations. For instance, elaborate more on how railways are more beneficial in terms of sustainability.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which makes it easy to follow your line of reasoning.
task achievement
You have provided some specific examples, such as the tourist attraction of themed trains in Japan, which helps to illustrate your points effectively.