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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below
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The bar graph illustrates the volume of
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 citizens visiting abroad from 1885 to 1995. The line chart displays the share of these tourists
traveling
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 to Australia during the same decade.
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, tourism abroad saw a significant rise in popularity in Japan during the period. The percentage of
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 visitors travelling to Australia
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 increased significantly over the decade. The number of
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 residents
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 out of the country grew steadily
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, starting at around 5
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 in 1885 to nearly 11
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 in 1990, almost doubling. A slight decrease in the figures was observed in 1991 to just above 10
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 before continuing back to the upward trend in 1992 and peaking at approximately 15
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 by the end of the period. The proportion of these
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 visitors welcomed by Australia increased dramatically from 2% in 1885 to more than double( nearly 5%) in 1988.
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 was followed by a slight drop to just over 4% in 1989 before plunging back and increasing
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 to just over 6% in 1994.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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