The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of survey asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
In the diagram it is illustrated how many
people
visited the Ashdown Museum in the year
before its renovation
and in the year
after and how satisfied the visitors
were during these two periods. Not only the
number of Add a missing verb
did the
visitors
rised
after the refurbishment, but Correct your spelling
rose
raised
rise
also
the proportion of satisfied people
increased in the second period.
The number of people
visiting the museum was steeply rising from 74000 in the year
before the renovation
to 92000 in the year
after the renovation
. While
there were 40% of people
dissatisfied with their experience at the museum in the first period, there were only 15% of unsatisfied visitors
after the renovation
. The proportion of the
very dissatisfied Correct article usage
apply
visitors
halfed
from 10% before to 5% after the refurbishment.
Correct your spelling
halved
Furthermore
, the percentage of the
very satisfied Correct article usage
apply
visitors
more than doubled from 15% to 35% after renovation
. In addition
, the satisfied
Correct quantifier usage
number of satisfied
people
increased from 30% to 40% in the second period, while
people
giving no response were stable at 5%.Submitted by nadja_stenz on
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