Nowadays, a lot of information about medical conditions and illness is freely available on the internet. Is this a good thing or a bad thing for most people? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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medical
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or with AI.
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of search platforms can easily
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available for individuals to search online which has a huge impact on the healthcare industry in which people are searching the
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about their health conditions
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doctors or nurses to convince for their actual health.
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the
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misleading the individual
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some particular conditions and
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. AI being really successful nowadays , is the num,ber
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people
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misleading them with the
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individuals are searching for on online
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over
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the bottom of it that
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hence
, sometimes
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it is
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always trustable.
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to me once that in his pharmacy
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a patient
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for
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to treat type 2
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. So, with digital
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platform
platforms
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very easy to get
information
online very easily.
On the other hand
, social media
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platform
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is
also
very bad
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for the treatment of some major
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there
was
this
lady
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have heard coming to the pharmacy to buy needles to get the dosage from
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of the pre-filled
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world
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you need to
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it after a certain sign showing on top of the
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the lady saw on
one
of the social media
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that there is
one
more dose left in that pre-filled
injectable
so she
was buy
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syringe with
needle
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to get that dose from that
injectable
which is not
advisale
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advisable
to use without the professional advice.
To sum up
,
internet
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is spreading a lot of
information
on online platforms which is not everytime advisable to use so, as an individual we need to be cautious about
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especially if its
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related
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health conditions. It can
mbe
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be
misleading sometimes but its
also
very helpful as well in terms of being updated about some of the best
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in the world which is very useful in some cases.
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