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Education should be accessible to people of all economic background. All level of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion.

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Across the globe, imposing excessive
price
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prices
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of
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on
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 every item has increased inflation
of
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in
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 every part of the earth and
people
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 are unable to pay their children's school fees,
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, some
people
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 argue that
education
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 should be free of cost and
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 notion because of equality and opportunity
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 for
people
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 who are under
poverty
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.
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,
education
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 is a fundamental right that should be available to all, regardless of their financial status.
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, if free
education
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 is imposed by the government
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new
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 generation would get higher degrees in
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 years and educated
people
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 can lead to a more skilled workforce, which in turn can boost the economy.
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, the government can bring
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flourish
yeas
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years
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 if they consider implementing
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 law.
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to
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it
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,
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another reason why
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 rule should be implemented as many
people
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 are
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poverty
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due to
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 unemployment, especially those living in rural areas.
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, a recent survey has shown that 60% of
people
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 in India are unable to provide their children
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education
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due to
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 lack of money as they do not have jobs, so if schools provide free
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 to all
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 poor youngsters can get
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education
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 to have jobs in the future.
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, they can support their poor families
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along with
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 working for government agencies. In conclusion,
providing
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education
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 to
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 generation without getting
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a fee
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fee
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fees
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 from
people
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, the authorities can reduce
poverty
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as well as
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 bring all the students on
equal
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an equal
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 level whether they come from
under
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poverty
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 or well financial
back grounds
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backgrounds
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introduction conclusion present
Your essay provides a good introduction and conclusion, but the introduction could be clearer and more directly related to the topic. Consider revising the sentence structure to make it more concise.
relevant specific examples
While you presented relevant examples, they could be more specific and clearer to enhance your argument. Consider using real-world statistics or detailed hypothetical scenarios.
introduction conclusion present
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points of the essay and restates the thesis.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • fundamental right
  • socio-economic
  • skilled workforce
  • investment
  • prosperity
  • social mobility
  • financial barriers
  • welfare state
  • cycle of poverty
  • living standards
  • overcrowded
  • strained resources
  • quality of education
  • economic feasibility
  • reallocating budgets
  • sustainable
  • subsidized education
  • tuition fees
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