•Nowadays, it is getting difficult for people to enjoy their lives in cities. Why do you think this is? What can the government do to make life in cities more enjoyable?
It appears that living in a city is getting tough.
Cities
are populated by large
chunk of immigrants and less with local residents. Add an article
a large
This
essay will show the reasons behind this
concern and what initiatives should be taken by government
to improve Add an article
the government
this
situation.
I believe that major
reason behind Correct article usage
the major
this
issue is “more people
less job opportunities” means we have low
number of employment opportunities in Change the article
a low
the low
cities
and high
number of Change the article
a high
the high
people
. For instance
, BBC news
showed that in Surrey, Canada, 5 Capitalize word
News
people
are sharing one small room, because they don’t have enough funds to afford a
individual rooms as they are jobless. Correct article usage
apply
Cities
nowadays have very thin roads due to
which traffic issues are rapidly increasing. On the other
hand
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hand,
people
are preferring
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prefer
transit
instead
of their personal vehicle. On top of that
there is Add a comma
that,
shortage
of Add an article
a shortage
the shortage
transit
vehicles as well, which is causing long wait time
for Fix the agreement mistake
times
transit
services.
I personally believe that government
needs to take some quick action to solve these problems. Correct article usage
the government
Firstly
, they have to create more job opportunities by inviting big multinational companies to our cities
, otherwise
they should stop inviting immigrants. Add a comma
otherwise,
Secondly
, they have to construct more
wider roads or more highways, till the meantime they constructing the roads, they should Change the word
apply
also
come up with an alternative routes
for resident so that Correct the article-noun agreement
alternative routes
an alternative route
it
will not impact their daily life. Correct pronoun usage
they
Thirdly
, government
needs to improve their Add an article
the government
transit
services as well by increasing the frequency of buses, trains etc. lastly
, there should be more events in Capitalize word
Lastly
cities
for entertainment purpose
, but before doing anything, permission should be taken by residents.Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
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task achievement
Work on providing more relevant and specific examples to support your main points. More detailed examples would strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the coherence by making clearer connections between your ideas. For example, explain how inviting multinational companies will directly create jobs and decrease overcrowding.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses consistently on one main idea. This will help in logically structuring your essay better.
task achievement
The essay addresses the question directly and provides relevant points on why city life is tough and what the government can do to improve it.
coherence cohesion
The introduction effectively sets up the issue and what the essay will discuss.
task achievement
The essay shows a clear attempt to address all parts of the prompt, offering both reasons and solutions.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion