The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.
The graph illustrates the number of
tourists
and the amount of tourist spending
of
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five different countries in 2012 and 2013.
Overall
, except
to
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China, the other countries demonstrated a stable rise
for
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the figure of
the
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tourists
. In both years, the USA had by far the largest revenue from the money which
spent
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by visitors. Out of five countries, France had the largest number of visitors in 2012 and 2013, at 83
million
and about 85
million
respectively.
Additionally
, the proportion of
tourists
in the USA
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from 66.7
billion
in 2012 to 69.8
billion
in 2013. Italy witnessed the lowest
tourists
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at 46.4
million
in 2012 and 47.7
million
in 2013.
According to
the table, it displays that the USA’s tourist spending had the most significant increase as it went from 126.2
million
in 2012 to 139.6
million
in 2013,
whereas
Spain showed a more moderate rise of
4.1billion
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4.1 billion
. Meanwhile, over the period of two years, Italy saw the lowest figure for consumption which slightly went from 41.2
billion
to 43.9
billion
.
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  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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