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Band 6

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's modern world, most developed nations provide financial support for developing countries.
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, some proponents advocate that it is not a practical solution for
poverty
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 and can be solved by implementing other methods.
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 providing financial aid has some advantages, I firmly believe that other viable strategies should be implemented to solve
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 supporting my perspective, illustrated with relevant examples, before reaching a well-justified conclusion In most developing countries, there are several issues in the legal and political structure. If other rich nations can give their approach or any other one,
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 can be mitigated. Because, without a well-stabilised legal and political structure, any nation cannot mitigate
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, in Sri Lanka, after introducing a new state policy,
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 their net personal income rate from $2100 in 2019 to $2900 by 2022.
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, there are some other major factors, one of the primary ones
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 that providing support for enhancing social development. Social improvements can be increased by conducting social awareness programmes and social events, developing the educational sector, and introducing both local and global opportunities. A recent research study conducted by the University of Peradeniya (2024) revealed that social development is one of the main aspects for reducing
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, especially in Asian countries,
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 as Nepal, Bangladesh, and Korea. In conclusion, taking everything into account, I reiterate my strong belief that social supports, including social awareness programmes and developing the educational sector, and supporting to establishment of well-structured legal and political policies, are more important than financial aid.

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Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction and summarize it in the conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Link your ideas more clearly to improve the flow of your essay.
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Provide more examples or more detailed explanation for each point to deepen your argument.
Task Achievement
You presented relevant examples to support your points, which adds strength to your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • economic inequality
  • developing nations
  • foreign aid
  • sustainable growth
  • technical assistance
  • expertise
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • fair trade
  • trade barriers
  • sustainable development
  • environmental conservation
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