Many cities have areas where cars,taxis and buses are only used. Is this a positive or a negative development? What are the effects of this on individuals and society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience
Many
people
are suffering from poverty
worldwide. In my country
, Japan, the reason why poverty
becomes
popular is Wrong verb form
has become
due to
low wages and educational inequality. I believe that government should provide citizens more
sufficient welfare system and financial support.
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with more
Firstly
, one of the major reason
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reasons
of
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for
poverty
in my country
is low wages. Recently, living costs have been going up because of the effect of exchange rates in the world. However
, Related to this
current situation, average
income among general Correct article usage
the average
people
little
change. Add a missing verb
has little
This
makes most people
difficult
to make a living just with salary payments from one job. Correct word choice
apply
In particular
, the average salary of the younger generation is about 200,000 yen, however
, they have to pay somewhat for insurance, so the rest is only approximately 170,000 yen. Therefore
, especially when people
live alone and have to pay for apartments, food, and utility bills, they cannot afford. Furthermore
, compared to other countries, Japan offers insufficient scholarship
with no repayment for students. most of them rent scholarships, paying back after graduating. With low wages, repaying significant Fix the agreement mistake
scholarships
amount
of Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
scholarship
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scholarships
drive
them Correct subject-verb agreement
drives
poor
living Change preposition
to poor
state
.
In order to deal with the financial issues, Fix the agreement mistake
states
government
is required to strengthen the welfare system and revise the cost of insurance. Add an article
the government
For example
, they should widen the sort of scholarship with no repayment, improving access to better education. Moreover
, they should cost down the insurance or facilitate to rise salary
. Change preposition
in salary
People
in my country
desire more financial support from their government to leave from
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apply
poverty
.
To sum up
, poverty
is widespread across the world, including my
own Change preposition
in my
country
. Japan has insufficient welfare and financial support, especially fo
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