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Band 7

You have just read an article Oman international travel magazine which contained some information about your town is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor f the magazine. In your letter Correct the information in the article Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Editor, I am writing about the recent article published in Haifa International Travel Magazine about [Your Town’s Name]. I appreciate your effort to promote our town, but I noticed some mistakes that need to be corrected. The article says that the main festival happens in March, but it actually takes place in May every year. It
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 mentions that the local museum is closed on weekends, but the museum is open every day except Monday. It is important for your magazine to provide correct information because many tourists use it to plan their trips. Wrong information can confuse visitors and ruin their experience. I suggest publishing a correction in the next issue or on your website. It would
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 help to check details with local sources before publishing in the future. Thank you for your understanding. I hope you will fix these mistakes soon. Sincerely, Artem Gendlin

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about the festival and the museum, such as names or possibly unique features, to enhance your argument and make it more engaging for readers.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly focuses on a single idea and connects with transitional phrases to improve the flow.
tone
The tone of your letter is polite and respectful, which is very appropriate for a formal communication like this.
task achievement
You clearly identify the inaccuracies and provide corrections, which meets the main aim of the task effectively.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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