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Test 1: The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Test 1: The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The
mape
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map
 illustrates the information about the internal changes in the structure of
central
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library
. It
also
 shows how it was before and what changes have been made to
the
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today's
mape
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map
maps
. Commencing to the first illustration,
that
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shows the image of
public
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a public
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library
 20 years ago. In which the chairs and tables were placed before the entrance,the right
side
 of the
library
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 two rooms and an open area,
in
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which one was for the tickets and book returns etc, the other on
top
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 corner was for children's
book
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books
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 and between them the adult non-fiction books were placed.
However
, on the opposite
side
,
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one block was for magazines and
news papers
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newspapers
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and the other was for computer games and a place of
the
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adult fiction books
was found
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. Moving to
the
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today's plan
of
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 the local
library
,
in
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which
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several changes have been noticed. The chairs and tables were
romoved
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removed
 from the entrance. On the right
side
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 the replacement of the enquiry with cafe and children's book room with
lecature
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lecture
 room was mentioned in the plan. Even the information desk and self-service machines were added to the open area.
Therefore
,on the left
side
,
instead
 of reading, the corner was fixed for the computers. The other room on the left,
have
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 two
sofa's
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 with a
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storytelling
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 point and a corner for the children's fiction books.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • significantly
  • expanded
  • restructured
  • sections
  • facilities
  • incorporated
  • digital catalogs
  • self-service kiosks
  • advanced computer facilities
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • transformative changes
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