The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024.

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the structure of the

village

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of Bunborough nowadays and developments for the

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upcoming

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year

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, the

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of new

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road

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and railway

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can be clearly seen in the map.

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Bunborough

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village

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become a developed area in the span

2024

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of 2024

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construction

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can be predicted for the coming

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. Generally speaking,

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construction

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railway

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a railway

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track will be the major development in the

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, there is

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in the amount of houses near the railway line can be seen,

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, the houses on the left side of

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road

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removed.

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construction

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of two new hotels can be seen

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year

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fishing

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port will be converted into

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the shops

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the same. Clearly, a new

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can be seen in the upcoming

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which connects the

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to Lynwich.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words village, year, construction, road with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

154 words

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The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024.

Private car ownership has been increasing over the past few decades. This has given ordinary people greater mobility, but has also led to concerns about traffic congestion and air pollution. Do the advantages of private car ownership outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say history is one of the most important subjects in schools .other people think that in today’s world subjects science and Technology are more important than history Discuss both this views and give your own opinion

Some people believe that women should be treated as equal to men when applying for a job with the police or the military. Others think that women are less suitable for this kind of job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter: explain what you are currently doing describe your suitability for this area of work say when you can attend an interview