The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024.

The two maps below show the village of Bunborough in the present day and plans for the village in 2024.
The two supplied maps
illustrates
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the structure of the
village
of Bunborough nowadays and developments for the
village
in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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year
.
However
, the
construction
of new
road
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and railway
line
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can be clearly seen in the map.
Overall
,
the
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Bunborough
village
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will
going to
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become a developed area in the span
2024
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, because a significant
expand
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in
construction
can be predicted for the coming
year
. Generally speaking,
construction
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of
railway
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a railway
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track will be the major development in the
village
.
On the contrary
, there is
increase
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an increase
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in the amount of houses near the railway line can be seen,
while
, the houses on the left side of
road
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the road
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will
going to
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removed.
Furthermore
,
construction
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the construction
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of two new hotels can be seen
in
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next
year
.
In contrast
,
fishing
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the fishing
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port will be converted into
Promenade
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a Promenade
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,
while
the shops
remains
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will remain
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the same. Clearly, a new
road
can be seen in the upcoming
year
which connects the
road
to Lynwich.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words village, year, construction, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • maps
  • village
  • present day
  • plans
  • 2024
  • overview
  • key differences
  • road network
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • recreational spaces
  • impact
  • environment
  • benefits
  • challenges
  • proposed changes
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