The following diagram shows the paper manufacturing cycle

The following diagram shows the paper manufacturing cycle
This
diagram indicates us
paper
manufacturing process .
This
diagram shows that we can get
paper
by
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two options. By recycled
paper
and new
paper
.
Firstly
, I want to write about how to get
new
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a new
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paper
.
First,
people get materials from different types of forests ,
then
it
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they
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transfers
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to
wood-chip
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wood chips
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.
There
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woods that came from forests get smaller into
wood-chips
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wood chips
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.
Then
it will
send
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to
Pulp
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the Pulp
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and
paper
factor . There in the industrial factory
wood-chips
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will pass all
processes
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the processes
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that lead to
appearing
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new
paper
. So , now I want to write about getting
paper
by recycling it . After the all processes that
paper
passed . Papers will
send
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to customers
, after
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and, after
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the consuming
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it
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apply
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become wasted
paper
. All the consumed
paper
will be collected and sent to
Pulp
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the Pulp
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and
paper
factory. After all
processes
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it will become
new
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a new
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one . By repeating
this
cycle, we all have papers , that everyone can use for their own goals
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