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The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows changes in the numbers of residents cycling to work in different areas of the UK between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart gives information about the number of UK commuters who travelled by bike in different places from 2001 to 2011. In general, all of these places in the table had an experienced increase in using bikes to
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 during the period. It is clearly seen that people who ride their bikes to
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 rose dramatically in 2011 compared to 2001. The percentages of four cities Outer London, Liverpool, Leeds and Exeter went up around 50%, and Outer London had the lowest point at 45%, from 33.836 to 49,070 travellers.
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 the number of residents who cycle to
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 in Gateshead was the lowest, 816 in 2001 and 1,314 in 2011. Turning to other cities, Cardiff, Sheffield, Newcastle upon Tyne, Manchester, Bristol, and Brighton and Hove, the figures increased from 60% to about 100%.
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, travelling to
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 by bike In Inner London was the most popular, even increasing
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%, from 43.494 people in 2001 to 106,219 people in 2011, and became the highest point.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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