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As computers can translate quickly and accurately with the development of technology, learning foreign languages is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that learning methodologies have surpassed our expectations as it has become more sophisticated and facilitated
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 technological advancement.
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 it’s commonly held belief that learning a different
language
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 could be
waste
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a waste
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 of time because of
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 developed solutions
such
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 as quick translators and other dedicated tools, there is
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 an argument
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 it. In my opinion, I consider that learning a different
language
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 is crucial in our day-to-day
life
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.
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 with, human interactions are critical in our daily communication which could be through spoken words,
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 indicates we should dedicate a particular
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 to
be
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our official way of communication.
It
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also
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 possible to say that, gaining the skill to learn a foreign
language
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 is your key to
open
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 endless gates of promising opportunities
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 cultural exchanges and other vital chances to
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life
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better
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a better
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life
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.
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, A recent study showed that
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a
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people who are bilinguals, have
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more than 45% income and 50% income and better job offers respectively than individuals who have not studied other
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language
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. Another point to consider is that being taught a second
language
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 is not a fancy thing to have, but it is a demanding aspect as
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 been
required
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a required
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 quality to have for uncountable firms.
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, it would enhance the probability
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 accepted in multiple fields
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 as learning in
top tier
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 universities which
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 demanding to accumulate more than
language
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 to
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pass
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 their initial acceptance criteria. In conclusion, I tend to believe that learning multiple
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language
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languages
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 is beneficial for human beings and for better
life
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 quality and significant chances of learning and working.

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coherence cohesion
To enhance clarity and coherence, consider avoiding repetitive phrases. For instance, instead of saying '45% income and 50% income,' use a single term to convey the meaning clearly. Also, ensure that each main idea is supported with relevant and specific examples to strengthen your argument.
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Try to elaborate more on the points you make, providing examples and deeper insights where necessary. This can help in demonstrating a more comprehensive understanding and engagement with the topic.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which effectively frames the argument presented.
task achievement
The topic is addressed directly, and the writer provides clear arguments both for and against the notion that learning foreign languages is a waste of time.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural understanding
  • Idioms
  • Cognitive skills
  • Problem-solving
  • Multi-tasking
  • Nuances
  • Human connections
  • Rapport
  • Machine translation
  • Interpretation
  • Context
  • Emotion
  • Idiomatic expressions
  • Homonyms
  • Engagement
  • Appreciation
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