The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about
people
's consuming
habit
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habits
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on
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of
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coffee
and tea in five Australian
cities
for
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over
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the
last
4 weeks.
Overall
,
people
had similar drinking habits in all
cities
with most
people
went
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going
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to a cafe to buy
coffee
or tea, except for Adelaide where there were slightly more
people
who purchased
instant
coffee
. The number of individuals who visited a cafe for
the
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beverages in the
last
four weeks was the highest in three
cities
; Melbourne,
Horbart
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and Horbart
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in Sydney, which accounted
more
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than 60% of visitors.
Likewise
, most
people
in Brisbane
also
went to a cafe to buy
coffee
or tea with just above 55%. The amount of
people
who purchased
instant
coffee
was the second highest in these
for
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areas, allocated to more than 45%
buyers
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of buyers
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in four
cities
.
In contrast
, Adelaide's
people
mostly consumed
instant
coffee
in the
last
four weeks, taking exactly half of the percentage.
Instant
coffee
buyers
was
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were
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also
notably high, with just below 50%. Similarities were seen in the number of
people
who bought fresh
coffee
where it was the lowest in all
cities
.
While
Sydney and Melbourne had more than 40%
buyer
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buyers
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, the number in Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart stood below 40%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, cities, instant with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • buying and drinking habits
  • percentage
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
  • consumption trends
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • notable
  • speculate
  • features
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