The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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people
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's consuming
habit
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habits
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on
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of
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coffee
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and tea in five Australian
cities
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for
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over
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the
last
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4 weeks.
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,
people
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had similar drinking habits in all
cities
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with most
people
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went
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going
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to a cafe to buy
coffee
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or tea, except for Adelaide where there were slightly more
people
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who purchased
instant
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coffee
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. The number of individuals who visited a cafe for
the
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beverages in the
last
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four weeks was the highest in three
cities
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; Melbourne,
Horbart
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and Horbart
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in Sydney, which accounted
more
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for more
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than 60% of visitors.
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, most
people
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in Brisbane
also
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went to a cafe to buy
coffee
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or tea with just above 55%. The amount of
people
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who purchased
instant
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coffee
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was the second highest in these
for
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areas, allocated to more than 45%
buyers
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of buyers
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in four
cities
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.
In contrast
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, Adelaide's
people
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mostly consumed
instant
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coffee
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in the
last
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four weeks, taking exactly half of the percentage.
Instant
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coffee
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buyers
was
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were
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also
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notably high, with just below 50%. Similarities were seen in the number of
people
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who bought fresh
coffee
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where it was the lowest in all
cities
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.
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Sydney and Melbourne had more than 40%
buyer
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buyers
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, the number in Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart stood below 40%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, cities, instant with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • buying and drinking habits
  • percentage
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
  • consumption trends
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • notable
  • speculate
  • features
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