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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#information #age #population #iceland #summarise #features #comparisons
The above bar chart elaborates
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 proportion of
Iceland
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Iceland's
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 community aged from the year 1900 to 2020.
Overall
, the most significant feature is the percentages of people
age
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aged
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 between 25-45
shows
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show
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 the strongest scores
on
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in
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 the four different time
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period
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.
Moreover
, the highest score
on
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in
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 2020 was related to
25
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the 25
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-54 population
within
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 approximately 30% .
While the
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The
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 lowest rate between 1990 and 2020 was related to
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the 15
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 -24
age
 group
on
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in
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 2020
to
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at
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 8%.
Its
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 noticeable that the
age
 proportion of 0- 14 and 15-24 remained constant between 10% to 11%
on
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in
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 1990.
However
, the number sharply grew to 30% in 25-54
on
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in
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 1990
then
start
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started
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 to decline gradually to 20% in
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the 15
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- 24
age
 group.
However
, the score
show
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shows
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dramatically
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 growth to 25 on Alderley people.
In addition
,
on
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between
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 2000 and 2010 the average
age
 rate exhibited a similar
fluctuated
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fluctuation
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 pattern
on
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in
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 all different groups. It is evident that
on
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in
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 2000 and 2010 the number was strong
on
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adult
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the adult
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 group (25-54) to 35% and 39%.
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