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The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.
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The given maps illustrate alternatives that have been happening for the ground floor of the art
gallery
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 since 2005.
Overall
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, it is important that the number of facilities that help people to have a good time in
this
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 place increase
while
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 some places were destroyed.
According to
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 the picture, today, the Entrance, Entrance hall and Presentation, in the centre of the building,
Exhibition
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 rooms 1 to 3, which are in the east of the
Gallery
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, are in the same situation as in the prior time.
In contrast
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, the sector of Stairs, next to the presentation, reduces and
this
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 area is divided into the Stairs and lift. The graphs demonstrate that they have found the ramp for the population who use wheelchairs next to the entrance.
In addition
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, in the past
this
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 place had one
exhibition
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whose
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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name
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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Exhibition
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 Room 4 in the west of the place in front of
Exhibition
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 Room 1;
however
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,
this
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 room has been replaced by the district for the children;
additionally
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, the office of the
gallery
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 is changed by the temporary
exhibition
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.
Furthermore
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, the cafe is altered to a vending machine and a
gallery
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 shop.
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