The chart below give the number of people employed in five types of work in a certain region in Australia in 2001 and 2008.
The bar chart illustrates the figure of
people
staffed in 5 fields of work
in one nation of Australia between 2001 and 2008.
In general, it is clear that
sales were the most common work
that people
wanted to do in 2001 and 2008. By contrast
, they did not like to work
in farming in the same years.
On the one hand, in the field of sales, there were more than 140,000 individuals who were selling goods in 2001 and this
figure slightly increased to around 165,000 employees in 2008. Moreover
, the proportion of people
who work
in computing and nursing was around 50,000 and 60,000 staff in 2001. However
, in 2008, it slightly increased to around 65,000 and 60,000 people
.
On the other hand
, figures for accounting were under 64,000 employees from 2001 and 2008 . in addition
, the number of employees who work
in farming was the lowest figure in this
chart, there were about 22,000 people
working in this
field and continued to decreased
in 2008.Change the form of the verb
decrease
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