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In many countries nowadays consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. do you think this a postive or negative development? give resons for your answer and include relevant examples?

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There is no doubt that these days most people in many countries buy
food
 from different regions .The question is.what
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 the advantages and disadvantages
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 my conclusion . There are several advantages of obtaining all
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 products which exported from various regions . There are many reasons to support
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food
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 contributes to
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 the economy of the countries . To illustrate , some rural areas depend on the plant
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 some people
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 of various types of foods allows the consumer to try different types of
food
 and know about other cultures.
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 there are numerous opinions about the drawbacks of getting
food
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 from other countries ,
For example
 , increasing the number of different products from different places can be affected and the local product will be decreased because of the export products which
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 by people .
In addition
, the country will
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extinsive
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 amounts of money
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to getting
getting
 the
food
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 in
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the supermarket
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supermarket
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. In conclusion , I could say that receiving different fruits and vegetables from various
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 contribute to
betterment
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving your logical structure by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. This will help make your arguments clearer and more persuasive.
task achievement
Strengthen your main points by providing more detailed and relevant examples. This can help illustrate and support your arguments more effectively.
task achievement
You've clearly presented both advantages and disadvantages, showing a balanced approach to the topic.
coherence cohesion
You have included an introduction and a conclusion, which helps to frame your essay effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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