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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English-speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter - Introduce yourself - explain what is wrong with the furniture - say what action you would like the landlord to take.

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Dear landlord, I am Robart,
Last
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 month me and my family shifted to your flat on a monthly basis rent agreement. I am writing
this
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 letter to show my dissatisfaction with the condition of some of the furniture in your accommodation. You have assured us that all the old things will be replaced by new ones before we got shift to
this
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 accommodation. I wanted to mention that there is a
lot
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lot of
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 furniture of wooden like a table, cupboard and chairs
is
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are
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 broken and damaged from all corners. Which will not look good when other people come to see our newly shifted house. They have to suffer from discomfort and it will feel
us
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apply
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embarrassing. All the furniture is not in good condition to use daily. I am requesting you to change it as soon as possible. If you can not change it, Please come up with your solutions or we need to find a new rental house to stay in which I do not want. Hope you will understand the importance of the situation. Thank you, Regards, Robart.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider organizing the content into clear paragraphs, each focused on a single idea. For instance, one paragraph for introducing yourself, another for explaining the issues with the furniture, and a third for your requested actions.
Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state what actions you expect the landlord to take, possibly specifying timelines or more detailed solutions like whether you'd prefer repair or replacement of the furniture.
Coherence and Cohesion
Review the text for small grammatical errors and awkward phrases to ensure a smoother read. For example, 'me and my family' should be 'my family and I', and 'got shift to' should be 'moved into'.
Task Achievement
The letter clearly states the problem and makes a request. This shows a suitable writing tone and purpose.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, creating a polite and respectful tone.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rented accommodation
  • Tenancy
  • Malfunctioning
  • Worn-out
  • Broken
  • Inconvenience
  • Repair or replace
  • Urgency
  • Comfort
  • Safety
  • Budget
  • Specific property
  • Immediate action
  • Inadequate condition
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