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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years.
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The line graph provides information about how the amount of
waste
 materials which was generated by
company
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Company
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 A,
Company
B
,and
company
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Company
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 C between the years 2000 and 2015.
Overall
,It can be seen that The
propotion
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proportion
 of
waste
 produced by
Company
 C increased,
wereas
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whereas
 it decreased in
Company
 A and
Company
B
.
Further
,the quantity of
waste
generate
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generated
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 by
company
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Company
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B
 was consistently lower over the period shown. Looking at the data sets
thats
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that
 increased,it
evident
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 that the generation of
waste
meterials
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materials
 in
company
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Company
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 C stood at about 4
tonnes
 in 2000.By 2015,it had increased
form
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from
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 6
tonnes
 to 10
tonnes
 in 2005 to 2015,respectively. Turning to the remaining data sets that decreased,it can be seen that the
waste
 materials produced by
Company
 A approximately 12
tonnes
 in 2000. The figures go down to 8
tonnes
 in 2015.The
generate
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of
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waste
 in
company
B
 stood at 8
tonnes
 in 2000,
Whereas
, it grew to 11
tonnes
 in 2005
then
 decreased to 3
tonnes
 in 2015,dramatically. Which was the lower point over the period shown.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, company, b, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "sets" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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