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The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005.

The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005.
The table compares data about the percentage of tax in 5 countries,mainly Sweden,the USA,Korea,Japan and Turkey over 30
years
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,between 1975 and 2005.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Koreans gave the least amount of money to taxes in all
years
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.
Additionally
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,
People
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 in Sweden paid more tax than other countries in 30
years
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. Japan increased to double their tax in
this
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 period.
Although
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 Sweden
people
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 gave 46% of their budget in 1975, Americans paid 25.1%
this
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 year. After 20
years
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,in 1995
this
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 number jumped to 51% for Swedes and 27.1% for the USA citizens.
At the end
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 of the period,Swedes gave 70.1% of their money and Americans paid 27.4%.
Moreover
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, Koreans spent 15.1% in 1975 and
this
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 data increased to 27.% in 1985.And after ten
years
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this
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 number decreased to 26%. Korean
people
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 gave 27.3% in 2005.
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,Japanese and Turkey
people
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 wasted 15 and 16.4% respectively in 1975.
While
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this
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 number fell to 23 and 24% in 1995.Interestingly is that
at the end
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 of the period, Japanese
people
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 gave 32.1% and Turkeans wasted 27.4%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tax revenue
  • Fiscal policies
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Direct taxes
  • Indirect taxes
  • Economic factors
  • Trends over time
  • International trade policies
  • Public services
  • Revenue generation
  • Tax collection data
  • Economic growth
  • Tax policies
  • Inflation rate
  • Comparative analysis
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