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The table below shows about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005 .

The table below shows about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005 .
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about
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a sum of money
fee
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 collected for 4 years between 1975 and 2005 in five
countries
 .
Overall
 ,
Sweden
 was the most expensive country
while
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during
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4
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periods .
Turkey
was
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got
higher
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a higher
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 mark in 1975 , but it was taken the
last
stage
 in 2005.
Sweden
was
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earned a lot of tax rather than
four
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the four
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 other
countries
 with 46
persentages
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percentages
percentage
,
while
Japan
 and Korea
was
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 similar mark 15.1% and 15% in 1975 . USA was taken
second
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stage
 with 25.1 % after
these
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stage
Turkey
 was taken with 16.4 % . After
decade
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 ,
Sweden
 was the first country with 47
persentages
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percentages
percentage
 which was compared to other
countries
 .
Turkey
 started to take
lower
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fee
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fees
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 and it was
the
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last
stage
 with 15 %
while
 other
countries
 had similar
persentages
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percentages
percentage
 with 25.4% in
USA
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the USA
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 and 27% in Korea in 1985 .
Japan
 was the next to
last
 country with 16% in 1985. After ten years ,
Sweden
 still
taken
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took
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first
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stage
 with 51 %
while
 other
countries
 started to collect
gradually
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 growth .
Japan
 and
Turkey
 had different 1 % with 23 % and 24 % in 1995 . The
last
 two
countries
 had similar
persentages
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percentages
. In 2005 ,
Sweden
was
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reached
highest
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its highest
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 point with 70.1 %
while
Japan
 was taken nearly half
point
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the point
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it
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with 32.1 % . The
last
 three
countries
 had similar
persentages
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percentages
 , USA and
Turkey
was
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 equal
with
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 27.4 %
while
 Korea had 27.3 % .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, sweden, turkey, stage, persentages, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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