The table below shows about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005 .

The table below shows about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005 .
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a sum of money
fee
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collected for 4 years between 1975 and 2005 in five
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.
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,
Sweden
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was the most expensive country
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while
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4
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periods .
Turkey
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got
higher
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mark in 1975 , but it was taken the
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in 2005.
Sweden
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earned a lot of tax rather than
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with 46
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persentages
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Japan
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and Korea
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similar mark 15.1% and 15% in 1975 . USA was taken
second
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stage
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with 25.1 % after
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stage
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Turkey
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was taken with 16.4 % . After
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,
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was the first country with 47
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persentages
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percentages
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which was compared to other
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started to take
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fee
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and it was
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with 15 %
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had similar
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persentages
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percentages
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with 25.4% in
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and 27% in Korea in 1985 .
Japan
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country with 16% in 1985. After ten years ,
Sweden
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still
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first
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stage
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with 51 %
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started to collect
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growth .
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and
Turkey
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had different 1 % with 23 % and 24 % in 1995 . The
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had similar
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persentages
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percentages
. In 2005 ,
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reached
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its highest
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point with 70.1 %
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was taken nearly half
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with 32.1 % . The
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three
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had similar
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persentages
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percentages
, USA and
Turkey
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equal
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27.4 %
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Korea had 27.3 % .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, sweden, turkey, stage, persentages, japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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