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The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005

The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005
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The table below shows the amount of tax collection in 5 dissimilar
countries
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 for four years around 1975 and 2005
Overall
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, there are 5 different
countries
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 and it gives information during 1075,1985,1995 and in 2005, Sweeden was the highest than other
countries
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, and the lowest one was
Turkey
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 In 1975
Sweedan
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 had 46 per
cent
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 and it was higher than other
countries
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,
then
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 the
USA
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 with 25 per
cent
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, and
Korea
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 with a normal 15.1 per
cent
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, and Japan had 15 and it was lowest than the other
countries
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,
Turkey
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 with 16.4 per
cent
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, during the next year in 1985,
Sweedan
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 once again was most top than the other
countries
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,
USA
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 was with midrange 25.4,
Korea
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 by 27 percentages, Japan with fewest 16 percentages,
Turkey
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 with least one 15 percentages
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 in
1995
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1995,
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Sweedan
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 was within the top 51 per
cent
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, and
USA
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 at 27.1 per
cent
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,
Korea
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 at 23% and was the lowest, and
lastly
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,
Turkey
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 at 24%
last
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 year in 2005
Sweedan
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 in
overall
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70.1
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at 70.1
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 per
cent
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, and
USA
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 at 27.4,
Korea
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 was smaller at 27.3 per
cent
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 and Japan over with an average of 32.1 per
cent
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,
lastly
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Turkey
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 with 27.4 per
cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly, overall".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, turkey, sweedan, cent, usa, korea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tax revenue
  • Fiscal policies
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Direct taxes
  • Indirect taxes
  • Economic factors
  • Trends over time
  • International trade policies
  • Public services
  • Revenue generation
  • Tax collection data
  • Economic growth
  • Tax policies
  • Inflation rate
  • Comparative analysis
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